onward, revisions

[kaigou]

For those of you who'd read before and were sitting on the urge to critique, you can get your chance now. I'm working my way through revising the first story. Formerly known as Tsiu 1, now (working title, at least) Weaving Girl's Orchard.

If you want to get on the filter, shoot me a reply. Since I'll be posting again from the beginning, you don't have to have read it already.

current teaser-draft:

Kini has always abided by her family's rule: work hard and keep your head down. It's the only way to survive when your mountain village straddles the border between hostile provinces. When an injured mountain-spirit is threatened, Kini is the only one willing to protect it. She'll have to navigate between treacherous monks and suspicious nobles, in a province on the brink of war, if she's to save a lost mountain-spirit who may not even be what it seems.

First chapter is here.

Comments

[annotated_em]

Do want! I was intensely curious to find out what happened next, heh.

[kaigou]

added! all I ask is that you reply & let me know you're still reading -- it helps to know where the story gets boring/loses your interest/etc. I don't tend to worry about that in the first draft, since that's part of the "what the hell happens next" of first drafts, but it's much more important this time around.

oh, and any critique/commentary is greatly appreciated, natch.

[theodosia21]

I'd like to be on the filter, thank you. I really enjoyed the first chapter and I'd like to see where the story goes next. :-)

[kaigou]

thanks! you're added. See my reply to Em (above) and that way I don't have to type it out again. Heh. I do appreciate critique/reaction/commentary, even if it's just "this character bores me," which can also be really useful to hear. Many tia!

[theodosia21]

Thanks, I'll do my best. :-)

[whatistigerbalm]

Oooh, thanks for the reminder! My mind is all over the place and I get distracted, but I love this story and will happily reread.

[kaigou]

alright, you're added!

[nagasvoice]

Me plz!

[kaigou]

you're added!

[hokuton_punch]

*raises hand* I know I fell behind and lost track of the original draft, but I'm looking forward to reading it again! And not getting lost this time. ... I'll be reading the new first chapter any day now, honest.

[kaigou]

Don't you have a dissertation you should be writing, or something? (heh)

added you!

[februaryfour]

I am here to express support, but I don't have the time for the reading (I'm sorry)!

[kaigou]

No obligation at all, and the support is much appreciated! I'll probably post small snippets publicly now and then, just to mark progress.