I read through the first chapter you'd posted! I do like, though I wasn't sure if the one or two repetitions (not grammatical or spelling so much as repetition, meaning a clause repeated, which we miss when proofing b/c our eyes just skip it) were from the draft or whatnot. Ignoring that purely technical detail, I do like the rest, the characterization, the gentle exposition (what little there is), and a lot of the details.
Sure, if you want me to. Send away, though I may hit you back with a request for help on a short story. You're the shorts-person here, not me, and I could use all the help I can get. Ffffffttt! ;-)
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Date: 19 Jan 2007 11:31 pm (UTC)Sure, if you want me to. Send away, though I may hit you back with a request for help on a short story. You're the shorts-person here, not me, and I could use all the help I can get. Ffffffttt! ;-)