simpler reviews
22 Nov 2006 10:18 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
kaigouThese are easy: Lost District and other stories, Joel Lane: depressing, so frickin' depressing, I think I'll go shoot myself now. Beautifully written and edgy, but four stories in and never mind, I'm too depressed to try another one. Cripes.
Also, Princess of Roumania, Paul Park: halfway through the first chapter and I want a chronology. That is to say, protag, what's her face (I put the book down a second ago and already I can't remember, that tells you something), runs into school friend in woods, they start hanging out. Once? twice? a daily basis? A page, I think this is now their second time hanging out, then maybe it's their tenth, then protag makes a comment that makes me think this is only the second time, wtf, over?
Plus, please do not write like you're frickin' five and mentally thwacked and think that this fits for a thirteen-year old, fifteen-year old, whatever young adult's brain. It doesn't. Believe it or not, I really do agree with Card when he says that kids do not need to use very small words and have bad senses of time for us to identify their voices as 'young' -- it's all in their priorities.
Someone needed to hit Park with the clue stick about trying to be a) a little more linear, please, and b) a little less versimilitude as to how 'scattered' kid attention can be.
Also, Princess of Roumania, Paul Park: halfway through the first chapter and I want a chronology. That is to say, protag, what's her face (I put the book down a second ago and already I can't remember, that tells you something), runs into school friend in woods, they start hanging out. Once? twice? a daily basis? A page, I think this is now their second time hanging out, then maybe it's their tenth, then protag makes a comment that makes me think this is only the second time, wtf, over?
Plus, please do not write like you're frickin' five and mentally thwacked and think that this fits for a thirteen-year old, fifteen-year old, whatever young adult's brain. It doesn't. Believe it or not, I really do agree with Card when he says that kids do not need to use very small words and have bad senses of time for us to identify their voices as 'young' -- it's all in their priorities.
Someone needed to hit Park with the clue stick about trying to be a) a little more linear, please, and b) a little less versimilitude as to how 'scattered' kid attention can be.